▶ Your Answer :
It
is debatable whether the teachers' ability to bond with students is one of the
most important factors to be a good teacher. This is an intriguing question
because opinions concerning this issue can be different depending on the
individual perspectives. In my opinion, however, I support that the teachers' talent to bond with students is a crucial element to be a excellent teacher for
the following reasons.
First of all, students can relieve their
stress. (Not enough for thesis) To be specific, bonding have a close relationship with teachers allows students to overcome a lot
of worries from a daily basis, which makes help them better how to manage stress, maintain
health, and have build a quality life. If teachers were are friendly to students,
students can easily talk with his or her. Students' stress leads to depression
as well as fall of academic performances. (Unnecessary part) Therefore, teachers should care for about their students by bonding with students more closely. For example. when I was in high
school, I met two types of teachers who are math and pysical education. Math
teacher was too strict and rigid for the students. She gave enormous pressure to
students to study hard and get high scores. Other students and I was very stressful
and dissatisfied with the teacher. (Better to point out "her teaching style") Eventually, we were discouraged to study
math and got the worst math scores which we have not ever got. On the other
hand, Physical education teacher was very kind and friendly to fully bond with
students. This helped friends and me to forget about the stressful aspects of
my daily life such as studying for exams and worrying about scores. In the physical
education class, we talked with the teacher about our school life. In addition,
the teacher taught us how to deal with stress and get along with friends well. Those
valuable lessons were never taught from math teacher. Through this experienced,
I realized that teachers should make an effort to bond with students, which
leads a healthy and fulfilling school life.
In
conclusion, I firmly believe that teachers' ability to make a strong bond with
students is a essential ability to be a good teacher. All things considered, it
is my belief that my argument regarding this topic has been effectively and
precisely delivered with the reasons mentioned above. Never should we forget
that this issue has my have a huge impact on our future.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 2 | 2 | 3 | Score | Limited 10-17 | - spelling error나 repeated words 가 많이 보이는 편이에요.
- 제시된 이유는 논지로써 설득력이 부족한 부분이 있어요. - 내용에서, 구체적으로 stress라는 요소가 rigid teacher때문이다? 그 stress가 학업과, 동기부여에 약영향을 미칠 수 있다는 연결고리를 정확히 설명해주셔야 합니다. 그리고 friendly라면 어떤 방식으로 유대감을 형성하는데 describe해주세요. - 이유는 최소 2가지 이상으로 잡아주세요.
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