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In the reading passage, there is ample support to the author’s claim that there are several environmental problems that destroy the Everglade. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as rebuttal to the author’s point.
First, the professor contends that water pollution by near agricultural facilities cannot be the problem for the Everglade’s destruction. The regulation offered the government (Are you talking about "government's regulation"?) do not allow the fertilize (Surely, fertilizer!/Why suddenly mentioned this?) to flow into the Everglade’s ecosystem. Moreover, the farmers changed the fertilizer that does not contain hazard substance for organism. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that the large amount of algae in the water by a lot of sugarcane factories nearby are the culprit to the Everglade’s ruin.
Next, the professor insists that there is a good new to the Everglade’s environment. the Everglade is restoring the ecosystem faster thanks to the project and the result is very promising. Although being restored fully takes much time. (Wrong grammar) The everglade will eventually accomplish the reconstruction. This counters the reading passage’s assertion that the soil lack caused by the fact that US government drained vast area of the everglade make ecosystem susceptible to wind erosion is responsible for the to the everglade’s demolition.
Finally, the professor argues that it is much unlikely that to extinct of many species which live lived in everglade’s ecosystem become extinct. The sugarcane is being converted to the marsh. (Why did you mention sugarcane here?) Also, there are abundant areas that a variety of species can dwell in, in those places, diverse organisms including panther have a greater chance of living. This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion that the human development that has a negative impact on wildlife brings about the everglade’s destruction destroying.
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