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In fact there are many companies I would like to work for, but BBC comes to my mind first. BBC is a media company which produces newses and broadcasts, and it delivers them all around the world. It is very famous media company, I have known BBC from 2000, when I visited the UK, as a travel??, and I often watched BBC at youtube. There are several reasons that I would like to work for BBC. I'm going to tell you few reasons among them. The first is I would like to deliver my message to others. The role of the media is to be a messenger, for many peple peoples, and I hope to use the media to send message to others. And second is that the BBC has lots of viewers in all around the world. Therefore I can make a message which can affect all around the world. Especially what I would like to say to the world is about the peace and ?? in Korea. In terms of my hope, BBC is better than CNN because CNN is in America and America is the party involved in Korea. (저는 한국인이니까 이 문장이 대강 무슨 말을 하는지 알 수 있지만, 제 3자는 그렇지 못할 수 있습니다. 아예 빼거나 조금 더 설명해주시는 게 나을 것 같아요.) For these reasons, I would like to work for BBC. Thank you.
총평: 일단 자신감있게 해주시는 점이 좋았습니다. 버벅거리는 부분이 없진 않았지만 그렇게 크게 문제될 것 같지는 않네요. BBC라는 단어가 너무 많이 쓰인 점은 마이너스이고, 두 세 단어 정도의 의미를 이해하기 어려웠지만 그래도 전반적으로는 충분히 좋은 점수를 받으실 수 있을 것 같습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)