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1. Describe an interesting job that you know.
- what the job is.
- what kind of education or qualities are needed to get this job.
- and explain why you think this job is interesing.
2. What kinds of jobs make lots of money?
3. What kinds of jobs make little money?
4. Describe a company that you'd like to work for.
- what this company is
- What this company is known for
- how you got to know this company
- and explain why you want to work for this company.
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1. interesting job-190422
I think being a dancer is interesting job is dancer. for being To a dander, people need to acquire some skills to express their emotions (s 발음을 명확히 넣어주세요!) by through the body. If you want have to be a dancer, and you need to learn a lot of type of dances like hiphop, and jazz dance, so on. I think there is The reasons why I think this job is interesting because dancers can touch the heart of many people because they can be impressed for some people (이 문장의 경우 문법은 바꿔드렸는데, 내용상으로도 수정이 필요해보입니다. 사람들을 감탄시킬 수 있기 때문에 사람들의 마음을 움직인다는 서로 내용이 비슷해서 인과관계로 삼기 어렵겠죠.). And I am not a good dancer so I am envy for good dancer and If you have acquired another people you can get a high salary, so it is also good point of to being a dancer.
2. jobs make lots of money-190422
I think the job that makes a lot of money is a doctor. For being To be a doctor, we have to study for a long time in the Medical doctor’s university. And they can get a high salary because they the job needs to sophisticated (이거랑) and complex skills and their job is very related to people’s life directly. So, because of very dangerous (이거 발음에 유의해주세요!) actions, so the job is just for very special people, And, If I have some doctor and I have to good at (두 단어를 명확히 구분해서 발음해주세요~)the subject such as biology, and another medicine, so on. (여기는 어떤 의미로 말씀하신 건가요?) and when I was in university and I was not good at the biology, and I was not able to can’t prepare to move for moving to a doctor’s university.
3. job make litter money-190422
I think the jobs make little money is the service occupation, especially telemarketer. the telemarketers are people who are sell sales something by phone, so They have to call many people during work for a their working time. However many people don’t like taking the call so maybe the telemarketers are very suffering from taking phone and maybe their heart is very often (t 발음은 최대한 약하게, 혹은 아예 드러나지 않게 해주시면 됩니다.) broken. (여기도 같이 댓글 주세요~) The telemarketer is not need to study Being a telemarketer does not require studying for a long time. It just need to requires service education when calling for phoning someone. And but other quality for being telemarketer, people have to be kind and have a good voice. And They also need also to be tolerance tolerant to in some people who make them angry.
4. company I like to work-190422
In My opinions are the company that I would like to work for is SAMSUNG company. The SAMSUNG company is the company which makes is making electronic products and semiconductors. I know well about this company because this company is the biggest company in my country, so it is very famous also very famous in the world. And, the reason why I want to work for (조금더 확실하고 명확하게 해주세요~) is company is the first because of thing is its high salary. because of high salary. And If I have and get some high salary I can make my life very abundant by the money. And the second reason is that they give workers some good health (l 발음이 현재는 잘 드러나지 않습니다.) care. So, If I have some pain in my body, I can be supported recieve the financial support through this health care by the company. And lastly, I can meet many people who have the best skills in various areas in my life. So, I can improve myself through (현재 t 보다는 d 쪽으로 들립니다.) learning from them, and It is a very good opportunity.
총평: 일단 장점에 대해서 말씀드리자면, 내용상으로 논제에서 요구하는 조건을 확실하게 잘 갖춰주셨고 비록 발음은 토종 한국인의 발음이긴 하지만 그래도 대부분의 단어 하나하나를 명확하게 발음해주신 게 좋았습니다. 반면에 단점의 경우는 아마 스스로도 인지하셨겠지만 머뭇거림이 비교적 많은 편이고, 문법 관련 문제 및 몇몇 핵심 단어가 너무 자주 쓰인다는 문제가 있었으므로 이쪽을 개선해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고하셨습니다 :)
감사합니다^^