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Describe an occasion when you celebrated your achievement
What you achieved
How you celebrated it
Who you celebrated it with
and how you felt about it
The time when I celebrated my achievement comes to my mind.
One day two years ago, I had a small party with my family. To be specific, the
reason is because I’d successfully challenged what I feared. Back in high school during summer vacation, I
went on a trip to Thailand with my family. At that time, I had a chance to
scuba dive in the splendid ocean. But, actually, I chickened out. Because the
sea was so clean (이게 조금 설명하기 어렵긴 한데...강세가 clean 보다는 so 에 들어가야 합니다. 문맥상 '깨끗함' 보다는 '너무' 를 강조해야하기 때문이죠. 그러나 현재는 반대로 되어있고요. 사실 대면 수업이었으면 금방 차이를 파악하실 수 있게 설명드릴 수 있는데 온라인 상으로 하는 거라 조금 어렵긴 하네요ㅠㅠ) that I could see the floors and feel the depth of the ocean. So,
from that day, I was afraid of water but, I wanted to face my fear, so every
weekend, I went to a swimming pool with my family. For about a year, I learned
from how to breathe when I swim, to the various ways of swimming from them.
Finally, one day, I reached a lane without stopping and then I came back
straight away. Yes, surprisingly, I overcame my fear. So, that evening, I went
to my favorite restaurant with my family to celebrate my challenge (보이는 걸로는 ge 가 있지만, e 발음은 거의 안 난다고 보셔야 합니다. 사전을 한번 참고해주세요!). They also
knew how I did in detail so they congratulated me sincerely. I more felt more a
sense of satisfaction and achievement. Maybe it was a little achievement and a
party for someone It many not have been a great achievement for someone, but I can’t forget that happy day.
총평: 한 주제만으로 돌려말하다 보니 가끔은 이런 문제가 생길 수 있는데, 이에 대해서는 주의해주셔야 합니다. 지금 글의 내용도 사실은 celebrate 쪽에 더 초점이 가야 하고요!
수고하셨습니다 :)