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If a country faces an economic crisis, it
is important for government to spend less on inefficient part like art. Scientific
research, public park and garden is more important to people. Scientific search
is related to health-care or daily lives. Public park and garden are always
opened for people to use daily. Art is also always with people’s lives but it
can be developed without government’s investment.
Art includes music, movie, paintings and
many other designed stuffs. Which means art is so closed to people’s lives. Anything
can be turned into art. It is good to get government’s support, but people can
create art without financial investment. For example, musicians who already
have their instruments can practice and make their own songs for performance. If
they need a financial support, showing their performance they can collect money
from the public. By solving their hardship, they become more independent. Overall,
without government support on art people can survive and solve their problems
through gathering people’s attention.
However, if government spend less on scientific
research or public park and garden, it will directly influence on people’s daily
lives. For instance, scientific research can discover cancer medicine or other
serious diseases treatment. Scientific research requires lots of money because
of trial and errors in experiments. Therefore, without government’s support, people
can not cope with monetary problems. Also, public park and garden needs
government’s care. Those runs with people’s taxes, which means people don’t
want to spend their expense to care public places. If government quit or spend
less on caring, then no one will invest to cover the gap. As a result, public park
and garden will be lagged of their qualities.
For these reasons, I think when a country
faces economic crisis, government spend less on art rather than scientific
research or public park and garden.
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