■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study ( For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.) Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.( For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.)
Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? |
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▶ Your Answer :
Most people think that if a university offers one-month
vacation during a semester to their students, they should volunteer for the
city or their own town. On the other hand, I think that taking classes which are not
related to the students' major is better. I believe that this will enhance
their academic background and make their time substantial.
To begin with, students can broaden their view by
taking non-major classes. They are very busy in the semester, because time is
always not enough for students to focus on their major study. One-month break
can be a chance for students to have other perspectives by reading diverse
materials. In this society, various academic knowledge is essential to achieve
success. For example, there is an outstanding social network corporation in
Korea. When the owner started his company, he mixed his business knowledge with
web-design skill. He could make his platform comfortable to use by himself. He
obtained this expertise from extra credit class when he was in the university. Thus, he could get
a huge success.
On top of that, students can do volunteering
work in their semester. It is not such a time-consuming work and investing in one whole (순서가 바뀌었어요) month for volunteering is not efficient. Helping local primary school
children or repairing the elderly’s house takes just few hours. To explain, when I joined a volunteering
club in the university, I went to the national park to clean up every one week.
It was valuable memories per se (per se가 무슨 뜻인가요?) for me. If I had spent a month on cleaning the
park, I would have burned out. (이 body는 조금 많이 빈약합니다. 문장을 더 추가해주세요.)
To sum up, students can have more
productive period by studying other subjects. They can not only develop their
potential, but also manage their time effectively. For these reasons that I
mentioned above, I firmly believe that student should take a part in non-major
subject in their given vacation.
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1. 지지하는 이유 하나,
지지하지 않는 이유 하나
이렇게 구분 지어 body를 쓰신 것은 정말 칭찬해드리고 싶습니다!
2. 문법은 대체적으로 깔끔한 편입니다.
하지만 내용에 있어서 디테일을 조금 더 살리시면 좋을 거 같아요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*