Q2-2) Some people believe that people who play
video games are learning important life skills. Others believe that video game
players are wasting their time. Which view do you agree with and Why?
A) First of all, playing video games gives me more opportunities to learn about cooperation. Cooperation is an important life skill.
To be specific, when I played video games
with my friends, we paid attention to play games. We
wanted to finish the game. Spontaneously, we could learn about cooperation.
채점기준 | 점수 | 첨삭 |
General Description | 2 | - cooperation이라는 주장을 뒷받침할만한 근거들을 가져오셔야 합니다. - 마찬가지로 분량이 많이 미흡하니 유용한 아이디어를 많이 생각해보세요. |
Delivery | N/A | |
Language Use | 2 | - an important life skill --> an important skill, which is useful in our lives - when I played video games with my friends, we paid attention to play games --> whenever I played video games with my friends, I feel I can focus on something better |
Topic Development | 2 | - 예제에서 단순히 we wanted to finish the game 으로 마무리하는 것은 주장에 대한 근거로써 설득력이 없습니다. convincing and coherent reasons들을 밝혀주세요. |